Lurking slyly
Putrid deadly droplets
Seething..........
Enveloping Soul and Mind
Gliding obliviously to oblivion
Sinking.....
Wounded Feet
Traversing vicious thorny paths
Bleeding.....
Scaling rugged peaks
Scattering fiery sweaty beads
Propitiating...
rashmi
13 comments:
:O ahem........i guess m nt the right person to comment here.....nt bcoz i did not understand the poem....bt bcoz i had to refer to the dictionary to understand it!
i am nt criticizing ur poem, please keep that in mind (its imp u don't get me wrong!).....its jst that my brain (rather brainwave, i dont hv a brain) is nt equipped enough to catch those soring high thoughts......well drafted must say!
O yeah addy,at least u tried to understand and u got it too-no question arises about ur "brain" factor:D.next time it'l definitely be very-very simple...however it can't be as "cool" your posts-u c "d gender factor"!:))
and thanx for complimenting my verses with "soring high thoughts"!
It must be rather difficult to shrug off the Albatross off your neck. But it would be best if you could drop it in the dead sea and walk free again.
it isn't the "albatross"- haven't done anything which would hang around my neck-it is the "emotional turmoil" regarding "insecurities":(....but thanx for going deep down into it:)
such deep anguish...let go they say but how...i face these moments too...thanx for giving expressions to those...gud portrayal :)
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helplessness and the need to reach a higher plane...nice poem...but the last word...propitiation...Is it God you refer to?
In Christian theology, propitiation is the work of Jesus Christ on the cross, by which He fulfills the wrath of God (both an emotional response of anger and a moral response of indignation)'
Here, i mean,we need to connect to god as tho we might not hv done anything leading to repentance,our situations in this life is a "mirror" of our previous birth for which we undergo "trials" in this life!YES it means GOD here-thanx for giving a serious thought.
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Wow..How you write all this..?? Expressive and Crisp.
very well written but to me it sounded heavy and sad...
nice one rashmi...enjoyed the feeling behind the writing..
nice!.. the pics are beautiful.
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